Adapting the Message to the Audience: Revise sentences a through j by adapting the message to meet the audience’s needs.

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Adapting the Message to the
Audience: Revise sentences a through j by
adapting the message to meet the audience’s needs. Identify the
specific weaknesses in each sentence.
a. We want all employees to be familiar with OSHA
requirements that pertain to their jobs.
b. Each project manager must complete the appropriate
performance evaluation forms before being awarded his
raise.
c. After the recent downsizing, most employees are
beginning to feel like rats on a sinking ship.
d. Please be advised that the city’s new smoke-free
policy is effective on January 1.
e. Since I took a leadership role on this project,
the team’s performance has improved.
f. The grapevine has it that the company shrink
is putting together more tests for us to take by the end of the
year.
g. You failed to read the disclaimer on our website
that clearly indicates that the transmitter you ordered does not
work with older generation MP3 players. Unfortunately, we cannot
honor your request for a refund.
h. Through strategic alliances and by internal
expansion of programs, Lox Enterprises is seeking to develop a
substantial market presence as the leading provider of management
consulting services in Illinois and its neighboring
states.
i. The best computers available for lease
through corporate channels are horribly outdated.
j. The supervisor asked Quan to go back and
make revisions to the final draft of the report so the data will be
completely accurate.