I need help for correction of this question. synthesize[DS1] Writting a reseach article is abit challlaenge to many stud

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I need help for correction of this question.
synthesize[DS1]
Writting a reseach article is abit challlaenge to many students
especially undergraude students. At first glance we can visualise
how to write a dissertation. According to Carlsson (2019) as
well as Gisslén and Gyllenram (2017), (Carlsson, F.2019), and
(GISSLÉN & GYLLENRAM, 2017)[DS2] both authors
dramatically focused on[DS3] the overall structutre of
research paper. They both have an introduction, method, result,
discussion, and conclusion in common. However, there is a huge
difference relating to the facts used..This might be a
different perspective caused by the different facts such as
different theories. [DS4] The purpose of this paper is to
examine if it is possible to fit a Markov chain model to students'
flow data, and thereby use the Markov chain properties to gain
information (Carlsson, 2019) on the other hand, says “Trading the
most volatile stocks is an efficient way to trade, because
theoretically, these stocks offer the most profit potential”
(GISSLÉN & GYLLENRAM, 2017). [DS5] They have come to
clear evidence to support their argument. [DS6] At this poin
it is more convincing because they [DS7] use mathematical
quantitative rather than theory compare to Filip Carlsson. Finally,
the introduction part conveys a brief message to the reader's
attention and it carries the research article's
idea.[DS8]
References
Carlsson, F. (2019). Can students’ progress data be modeled
using Markov chain?
Gisslén, F., & Gyllenram J. Comparing the predictability of
the next day stock trend between high volatile and low
volatile stocks using a feedforward neural
network[DS9]
[DS1]Dear Abdiasis,
. You are kindly urged to not repeat this when you are going to
submit your essay,
Also, if you look at the words highlighted in cyan, you will
notice as I have that you have not revised your text before
submitting it.
[DS2]This is not how we cite authors within the text when
using APA format. Only the last name(s) typed in sentence case
without parantheses.
[DS3]If you start your sentence with ACCORDING TO, then
you have to continue with a subject. This here is a wrong sentence
structure.
[DS4]Ambiguous: DIFFERENT has been used three times, does
not provide any information.
[DS5]It is not clear where the information from one source
ends and the other’s begins. Also, if quoted directly by using
quotation marks, the page number must be provided.
[DS6]HOW SO? Requires expansion, better support.
[DS7]WHO DOES THEY REFER TO HERE?
[DS8]Which is what exactly?
[DS9]This is not how references are listed in APA format.
Check information and material provided in Seminar 3.